04.29 - Introductions (Critique > Drafting)

We began today's class by looking at a future exploration introduction on baristas. Everyone had an opportunity to read, critique, and score the introduction (see handouts below) and then we shared out people's assessments of the introduction through the four corners activity (see slides 22 and 23 of the four corners slideshow below).

 Internal Anatomy of an Introduction / Four Corners

Next, we looked at a revised version of this introduction to evaluate how changes the author made impacted the effect and score of the introduction. After looking at both introductions, we compared them structurally and noted how differences in grammar, spelling, and sentence structure influenced a reader's understanding of the paragraph despite each introduction having the same overall structure.

Initial Introduction:

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Revised Introduction:

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For homework, everyone should draft an introduction by hand for their future exploration project.

Everyone can use the thesis creation model below to come up with a powerful thesis.

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Handouts:
Barista Introductions

Submitted Today:
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Homework:

Produce a handwritten introduction for your future exploration paper and bring it to class tomorrow (we will be critiquing and revising them).

Revisions:

Due Friday, 5/08Future Exploration project (sources, notecards, interview questions, interview notes, paper)